The Tree
(TW: Suicide)
There was a tree
And so it stood
Upon the hill that summer.
There was a girl
Who was never far
Away from it, or him.
There was a boy
Who feared to think
Of losing her come fall.
But still the tree
Stripped of its leaves
Changed as it must in autumn.
And so the girl
As he knew she would
Went away for winter.
Then went the boy
So lost, alone
To the tree, remember.
There was a tree
Bare but for one
A soul who never left it.
And there was a girl
Who wanted none
But to be joined as lovers.
Yet there was a boy
Who never knew
As he hung from the tree in spring.
The tree was downed
And so was lost
As things must go in these times.
The girl went silent
And she was lost too
As things do go in these times.
The boy went to nothing
And an overwhelming lack
Is as things go this time.
The nothing, the nothing
And still that joins the three
Is as things go this time.
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So I wrote that poem a few months ago, and then decided to ask other, smarter, more poetry oriented people to beta read it for me over on Fictionpress. At the time, I thought that this would be a good idea, but now I’m not so sure. I want to tell you all why.
I originally had a series of words and phrases different, and I liked them much better than they are now. But, I didn’t save my original and then I made edits, switching stuff around like other people wanted, and now I don’t remember how to switch it back to the way I like it. And that kind of sucks.
I feel like poetry is a very very personal matter, and it’s difficult when you let other people jump in and try to make changes for you. I’m a huge fan of beta reading for stories, but I don’t think you can truly get in touch with someone’s emotions enough to beta their poem.
When I asked one girl to beta, she ended up trying to change the entire meaning of my poem because she didn’t get it, which TOTALLY sucked. When she was done it was this happy go lucky poem and it didn’t make any sense the way I wanted it to. I know that most people aren’t like that, and you just have to find the right reader, but I think that all too often people can have different poetic interpretations and change it to make it make less sense to you personally. If that makes sense.
Obviously, you could just SAVE A COPY OF YOUR ORIGINAL LIKE A SMART PERSON. and that would save a lot of problems. So maybe it’s just me, but I want to know your perspective!!
Do you think it’s possible to successfully beta read poetry?
Awesome post, Joce! I’m excited to see more TWW posts from you 😀
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Thank you!!!!
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I think it is possible. When I think of editors, I think of people who help with grammar and change a few words, not the whole story.
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Yeah that’s true, I just feel like with poetry every word matters for the “story” so it’s harder to make changes
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Hmm, it really depends. Poetry is hard to beta for because it’s written on whatever you’re feeling at the moment, or what your thoughts are. It may not make sense, but it’s written down that way for a purpose. If someone tries to just make it better by rewording one little phrase, it can throw off the whole meaning. However, if one phrase is unclear, a beta might be able to make it less confusing. I’m leaning towards the “no” side of poetry betas though. 😛 Great post, and I love the poem! ❤
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Thank you so much!!!
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